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126 pages |
17 hours ago
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Draft 3
Beatrix is a stripper in Brisbane. She dances to pay her rent and put herself through school. She also harbours a dark pain left by a manipulative psychiatrist from her childhood. When their paths cross again, she vows revenge against him once and for all.
(This is an incomplete draft, however I am already starting a third draft. Some scenes have very very brief descriptions on what should happen)
There are some formatting errors thanks to the upload software.
(This is an incomplete draft, however I am already starting a third draft. Some scenes have very very brief descriptions on what should happen)
There are some formatting errors thanks to the upload software.
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Overall, this was a solid thriller script that I could see being turned into a movie with some fine tuning. I would mainly recommend cutting back on the flashback scenes a bit so that the script doesn't feel like it's overstaying its welcome as well as removing filler dialogue and just fixing those weird formats. Glad I got to read and review this and good luck on future drafts!
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