I ran out of time to do a full read of the script. Try adding more time for reviews.
1) You dialog is unrealistic. I do not read scripts, I put them in a text to speech program and listen to the script. You need to do the same. Close you eyes and hear the voices. Do they sound different? Is everyone using the same words? Are you putting in exposition instead of dialog?
2) You have people going into someone back yard and trying to start a r...
Some strange, beautiful flowers have come to bloom and one of its side effects is that some weak and vulnerable humans are falling sick.; but one among the weak will find voice and question the worth of the flowers.
Joe Perkins sets himself up in a new neighbourhood, after making friends, he learns that the locals are up to something rather sinister, and Joe is all part of it.
True story of Connecticut businessman, Jim Steffman, who is inadvertently pulled into the world of the Gambino and Patriarcha crime families after befriending a man named John Hurley...America's most wanted man.
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