Awards
Approved
Nominee Draft #1
Summary
2 Reviews |
10 pages |
3 years ago
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Draft 1
Just looking for thoughts
Industry Reviews
This has great potential to be a hard hitting drama about how it can be when two people fall out of the love. This currently feels like the beginning of making that script, and with proper revising, I think this short script will become that great. Hopefully my feedback will help you with future drafts, and good luck!
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Peer Reviews
The concept of going back and forth between the meet cute and the end of the line between them is interesting. This is true in a lot of relationships where people do drift apart. Effectively the honeymoon phase ending and stuck in a rut or the relationship running it's course.
This however is a double-edged sword. You attempted to use flashbacks. Flashbacks should be used sparingly and only when necessary, which they were not formatted correctly...
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